The main character (whose name I have forgot...its very "Dessen") is a 17 year old on her way to London who can't be bothered to google. Why else would anyone ever take a taxi over the Heathrow Express? I mean, there is a charm to wandering streets lost, say in Florence when you don't know what train you're catching, but not when you are looking for something that starts at a certain time at a church in another part of London.
When your "quirky things the male character knows that are supposed to build depth and *fuzziness between the leads*" make the main character sounds like a complete what's a not completely offensive term...ninny ("cumulus, he had said." I know a lot of 7 year olds who know 10x more about weather patterns) who has never cracked open a book, you have a problem. Like who is your audience? 17 year old girls who are *likely to reading your book* read. They've probably cracked open quite a bit of Dickens and Austen.
Overall, it was kind of cute and fluffy. But when a lot of the plot hinged on the character being a not self-sufficient moron with a grudge who is too self-centered to ask the most basic questions of anyone else's life and who doesn't bother googling anything about an awesome city, you have a bit of a problem.
Also, I read a review make a reference to "London flavor"? Vague mentions of tube stations does not make "London flavor." I am sorry.
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